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The Two Advantages of Using Twitter as A Social Media
Twitter, a website offering a form of micro-blogging social network that allows users to send and read messages called tweets, has two useful advantages why it really needs to be used. At first, by using twitter as a social media, people can know the latest or the hottest news which becomes very popular in the world recently. Because in twitter, the hottest news will appear in the line of trending topic feature. This is because, the hottest topic will be talked by most of the users, and each of the users will make the hashtag of it, so the hottest news will automatically appear in the trending topic feature. Therefore, all the users of twitter will easily get the information relating to the newest or hottest news in the world. For example, when a user logs in the twitter, they can directly click the trending topic feature, which the symbol is hashtag, so the hottest news will directly appear and he / she just needs to click the topic that they want to know more. Another advantages is twitter enables its users to share their ideas to others. It is because by using twitter, all the users without exception can share their ideas or even their feelings to be shared. For examples, there are many motivators who use twitter as a place for them to share motivations for his / her followers, then his / her followers can retweet the ideas if they do like it. Therefore, much information or even motivation can easily be got by the users of twitter. In conclusion, the advantages of using twitter as a social media is not only for getting the latest or the hottest news in the world easily but also for getting so much information or even a lot of motivation from many motivators in the world.
the picture of when I did peer comment of my friend's work
This is the way I give comment to my peer, based on the rubric given:
This single paragraph gives me some information about the benefits of telegram which I have just known after reading the paragraph. First of all, let me say thank you for the information. However, in my opinion, the title is is quite good, but I think it is too general as a title of a paragraph as there is not any limitation from the writer in telling what she is going to discuss in the paragraph. She just wrote the benefits of telegram. It means that there is a possibility that there will be two or more benefits that will be discussed in the paragraph. Beside that, this paragraph does not show a clear topic sentence. I do not think that there is a topic sentence which covers the whole text. It does not limit how many benefits that will be discusses, and it was not written about it in the paragraph. Unfortunately, this paragraph does not have the controlling idea. Because in this paragraph the writer did not mention the quantity of the benefits. In other word, I think because it does not have any controlling idea, the way the writer developed the paragraph is not directed well. I mean there are too many things discussed in a single paragraph. In my opinion, the paragraph does not show a concluding sentences. Because the writer did not write the conclusion of what she have discussed in her paragraph. It is because there is not any concluding sentence, there is not any appropriate signal word which should be used to begin the conclusion of the paragraph. It is also because there is not any controlling idea mentioned, so there is not any controlling idea mentioned at the end of the paragraph. I also think that there are some unclear sentences which were used such as the words lightweight and interface. When I pay attention to the unity of this paragraph. I think that this paragraph has a quite good unity. As each sentence supports the point which talks about the benefits of telegram. It also has a quite good coherence, but I think that the way the writer related each sentence should use some conjunctions or transitions, in order to make it become coherence well. When I pay more attention to the grammar and mechanics. I am so sorry to say that there are a lot of errors in both aspects. For example, in this phrase 'more than just pictures and video'. It should be videos not video. As it has the conjunction 'and', so the word photos and videos must be in the parallel form. The writer also did some errors in the mechanics or writing, like using the capital letter in the middle of the paragraph, and also in the beginning of a sentence.
06011181520011
The Two Advantages of Using Twitter as A Social Media
Twitter, a website offering a form of micro-blogging social network that allows users to send and read messages called tweets, has two useful advantages why it really needs to be used. At first, by using twitter as a social media, people can know the latest or the hottest news which becomes very popular in the world recently. Because in twitter, the hottest news will appear in the line of trending topic feature. This is because, the hottest topic will be talked by most of the users, and each of the users will make the hashtag of it, so the hottest news will automatically appear in the trending topic feature. Therefore, all the users of twitter will easily get the information relating to the newest or hottest news in the world. For example, when a user logs in the twitter, they can directly click the trending topic feature, which the symbol is hashtag, so the hottest news will directly appear and he / she just needs to click the topic that they want to know more. Another advantages is twitter enables its users to share their ideas to others. It is because by using twitter, all the users without exception can share their ideas or even their feelings to be shared. For examples, there are many motivators who use twitter as a place for them to share motivations for his / her followers, then his / her followers can retweet the ideas if they do like it. Therefore, much information or even motivation can easily be got by the users of twitter. In conclusion, the advantages of using twitter as a social media is not only for getting the latest or the hottest news in the world easily but also for getting so much information or even a lot of motivation from many motivators in the world.
This is the pic when we did peer comment of my paragraph;
the picture of when I did peer comment of my friend's work
This is the way I give comment to my peer, based on the rubric given:
This single paragraph gives me some information about the benefits of telegram which I have just known after reading the paragraph. First of all, let me say thank you for the information. However, in my opinion, the title is is quite good, but I think it is too general as a title of a paragraph as there is not any limitation from the writer in telling what she is going to discuss in the paragraph. She just wrote the benefits of telegram. It means that there is a possibility that there will be two or more benefits that will be discussed in the paragraph. Beside that, this paragraph does not show a clear topic sentence. I do not think that there is a topic sentence which covers the whole text. It does not limit how many benefits that will be discusses, and it was not written about it in the paragraph. Unfortunately, this paragraph does not have the controlling idea. Because in this paragraph the writer did not mention the quantity of the benefits. In other word, I think because it does not have any controlling idea, the way the writer developed the paragraph is not directed well. I mean there are too many things discussed in a single paragraph. In my opinion, the paragraph does not show a concluding sentences. Because the writer did not write the conclusion of what she have discussed in her paragraph. It is because there is not any concluding sentence, there is not any appropriate signal word which should be used to begin the conclusion of the paragraph. It is also because there is not any controlling idea mentioned, so there is not any controlling idea mentioned at the end of the paragraph. I also think that there are some unclear sentences which were used such as the words lightweight and interface. When I pay attention to the unity of this paragraph. I think that this paragraph has a quite good unity. As each sentence supports the point which talks about the benefits of telegram. It also has a quite good coherence, but I think that the way the writer related each sentence should use some conjunctions or transitions, in order to make it become coherence well. When I pay more attention to the grammar and mechanics. I am so sorry to say that there are a lot of errors in both aspects. For example, in this phrase 'more than just pictures and video'. It should be videos not video. As it has the conjunction 'and', so the word photos and videos must be in the parallel form. The writer also did some errors in the mechanics or writing, like using the capital letter in the middle of the paragraph, and also in the beginning of a sentence.
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